Monday, March 17, 2008

Her chronicle!

At 5, she loved her mother.
At 7, they wished they had a son...

At 10, she loved her father.
At 12, they prayed to have a son...

At 15, she loved her best friend.
At 17, they thought they have had enough of her...

At 20, she loved him.
At 22, they said, ‘She’s gone! Ah! Finally, we’re done!’...

At 25, she loved his family.
At 27, there wasn’t a sign of her...

At 30, her father was queer, her mother looked wretched, her friend sought justice, he loved his new bride, his family was counting money...

All what remained of her was a broken, melted bangle, a charred piece of her sari maybe, a little ash and lots of dust in that barren, burnt, ruined house, struggling with loneliness.

20 comments:

Chaithanya Kamath said...

Phew!...scary stuff man!...

d SINNER!!! said...

@ kamath...

just a piece of what goes on in at least 1000's of homes in India..

Scribbler said...

A very bitter but true Chronicle

keep it rollin;)

Indisch said...

Yeah... the lines couldn't have been more true. Awesum rytin btw!

Alok said...

OMG!
Awesome work!
Very effectively expressed.

d SINNER!!! said...

@ scribbler...

I wish if it was andr piece of fiction..

@ indisch...

thnx..

d SINNER!!! said...

@Alok...

:)...

freesherry said...

extremely thought provoking
imagine people actually thinking this way and doing such beastly things for a wad of money

d SINNER!!! said...

@sherry...

and we know, its happenin!

vEENs said...

the love that i look for is not there~!

ain't it scarier....not finding the lov that u once saw ..

aint it scarier to see the cold body...which used to warm to ur touch...

aint it scarier to lok for love, when it was there a lil while ago!

i m sorry...if i made no sense..but then i dnt make sense to my self :)
very aptly potrayed..i wish.....we cud jus stop lookin for love once!

d SINNER!!! said...

@ Veens...

u made sense indeed but I am not yet able to connect it to this one...maybe ur point is how love later on turns cold...

Neeku said...

Tailored in simple words but ... profoundly expressed the blatant truth!

Awesome work!

"fiZZ"ing iNsiDE !!! said...

How do u do that ???
No temme.How do u do that???
So much in so less !!!

Vandita said...

very well written, descriptive and moving!

Malora Fernandes said...

A very strongly conveyed message. Nicely done.

vEENs said...

****but I am not yet able to connect it to this one

not jus any love... it is the case in all the relationships tat we have...

people say that parents can't and won't... but look at yur own post...aint their lov[ if u can call that) cold already even b4 the kid is 5~? seriously pathetic!

d SINNER!!! said...

@ neeku...

thnx!!

@fizzing...

he eh!!!secret...shshhssh...

@Vands...

thnx..

d SINNER!!! said...

@ Malora...

thnx!!!

d SINNER!!! said...

@ veens...

yep..i agree...

rhapsodysinger said...

The missus and I are not thinking about kids at this point of time. But down the line she'd like to have 1 boy and one girl, I two daughters. Nothing altruistic there, just security for the future. I feel girls are more concerned about their folks than guys and also, girls are a bit less gossipy than guys. Sanity and rationality forces me to think of girls as better investments than guys. ( I know all the bashing i might get equating kids with investments)